Correction d'un essai

Nombre de messages : 10 Date d'inscription : 08/05/2010

Bonsoir,
En fait, j'ai un essay à faire, je l'ai faits et j'aimerais vous demander si vous pourriez me corriger mes fautes ...
( ps: le sujet c'est en gros si on admire la carriere, le parcour des createurs de google)

Voila ce que j'ai fais...
On the one hand , I admire the creators of google for several reasons . Indeed, Du jour au lendemain, two men invented a full of genius search engines who facility the live of all people . It creates a veritable phenomene on the world. Indeed, thanks to this discovery, just tapping an request and you can find lots of pages who renseign you very well . This is absolutely tremendous ! Before, when you wanted to search an autobiographie, you had to look for in a book, whereas now, just tapping the name on goole , and (tu es servis, sans fournir aucun effort?) . Moreover thanks to google yoou can see the news, if you have missed, the hour of your seance on cinema, the meteo …. Moreover, this creations have permitted to develop the informatic , to improve our lives, to (faire un pas dans la techonologie?), to improve our lives thanks to numerous things we could do …..
However, this career of the creators of google is unusual, rare. Indeed, (il faut?) be completely crazy and very ambicious to lance in this kind of project. It doesn’t arrive to everyone, to give up their study , and in spite of become multimillionaire….. They have had lucky.

Merci d'avançe!!!

Salut, Peacee.

Quel plaisir de te revoir. Correction d'un essai 36_1_13

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On the one hand , I admire the creators of Google for several reasons.
- En anglais, on met pas d'espace avant la ponctuation.

Indeed, Du jour au lendemain, two men invented a full of genius search engines who facility the live of all people .
Overnight, two men invented an ingenious search engine which would make life easy for everyone.

It creates a veritable phenomene on the world.
Its creation was a world sensation.

Indeed, thanks to this discovery, just tapping an request and you can find lots of pages who renseign you very well . This is absolutely tremendous !
In fact, thanks to this creation, you can download lots of informative webpages just by typing one or more search words. This is absolutely tremendous!

Before, when you wanted to search an autobiographie, you had to look for in a book, whereas now, just tapping the name on goole , and (tu es servis, sans fournir aucun effort?) .
Before, when you wanted to search for an autobiography, you had to look for it in a book; whereas now, all you have to do is type the person's name on Google to get an immediate response. No effort is required.

Moreover thanks to google yoou can see the news, if you have missed, the hour of your seance on cinema, the meteo ….
Moreover, thanks to Google, you can watch the news, the weather, films, episodes of TV series, or anything you may have missed.

Moreover, this creations have permitted to develop the informatic , to improve our lives, to (faire un pas dans la techonologie?), to improve our lives thanks to numerous things we could do …..
In addition to all of the above, the field of computer science has advanced because of this creation. It has improved our lives, allowed us to take a step forward in this technolgical era, and enabled us to do innumerable things that were undreamed of more than two decades ago.

However, this career of the creators of google is unusual, rare.
However, the career path chosen by the creators of Google is both unusual and rare.

Indeed, (il faut?) be completely crazy and very ambicious to lance in this kind of project.
You'd have to be completely crazy or extraordinarily ambitious to embark on such a venture.

It doesn’t arrive to everyone, to give up their study , and in spite of become multimillionaire….. They have had lucky.
It doesn't happen to everyone where, in spite of sacrificing your education, you become a multimillionaire... but they were lucky.

Nombre de messages : 10 Date d'inscription : 08/05/2010

Salut Doudou :DDDD
Merci beaucoup pour ton aide très précieuse :DD. Je ne sais pas comment te remercier pour tout l'aide que tu m'apporte encore une fois ... C'est vraiment gentil et rare que l'on puisse trouver des gens comme toi qui nous aide, tout naturellement, et je suis tres contente d'être tombé sur ton site !! Une fois de plus, merci beaucoup pour ton aide :DDDD

Bonjour, Peacee.

You're welcome (Mais de rien). It's my pleasure to help you. That's why I'm here. Bonnes notes.

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