Lettre en anglais

Salut, je suis en terminale S et j'ai un DM à faire en anglais qui consiste à rédiger une lettre à son ami en lui racontant ses vacances.
C'est donc ce que j'ai fait et j'aimerais si possible avoir des corrections sur mon travail, merci.

Hey dude, how it’s going?

I hope you are having fun in Paris! I’m writing to you to tell you about my holiday. During these holidays, I was in… LOS ANGELES!!! Yes bro!!! And more precisely in HOLLYWOOD!!! It was awesome! When I arrived in LAX (the airport of Los Angeles), everything was wonderful: the weather, the cars and even, the girls… Furthermore, people are of a kind incredible. I stayed in a hotel with swimming pool near of the famous boulevard, Hollywood boulevard.

But the most incredible was the visit to Universal Studio, where they do films.
It was fantastic! I learned a lot of techniques about special effects so it was funny and enriching. I saw where they turned your favorite series, Desperate Housewives.
In fact the series is turned in a phantom district specially created for it. Then, I made an incredible attraction on the theme of Simpson.

Otherwise I was also in VENICE BEACH in particular in the principal avenue which is incredible because people are so simple, dress as they want and where there is a heap of street shows and unusual.

Finally, the best rest the visit of the staple center where there was the ceremony for Michael Jackson who was, you know it, my favorite artist! And you know what?! On the Hollywood boulevard, to keep him in my thoughts, I took a photo on his star and with his double! That was a very moving moment and I know well that there will be never two as him! Moreover, I put a rose and a word on his star …

Otherwise, Los Angeles has there not to say, it’s really a heaven on Earth.

See you later,
KARIM xxx

Bonjour,

je te remercie beaucoup pour cette correction.

Et voici ma photo:

A bientôt peut-être