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Date d'inscription : 15/02/2006

MessageSujet: expression   Mer 24 Sep - 6:00

Bonjour Doudou,

Pourrais tu jeté un coup d'oeil sur ces deux sujets d'expression et corriger surtout les grosses erreurs?



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In your choice of career, are you ready to go against your parents' whishes? (150mots)

When adult was a small child, his parents educated him and gave him and gave him a decent life. But a day, the small child become an adult which responsibility and works.
Sometimes, you must do a choice between you parents' will and your career.


If I am must to do this choice, I will be depress, because I love my parents and I couldn't hurt them or abandon them. So, I think that I choice another career if my parents were against my first choice. I want see them happy.
But if my career is very important for me and if I don't have a second choice of career: I don't sure to accept my parent's whishes.
I will explain them the importance of situation and perhaps they accept my choice.



So you can sometimes be in embarrassing situation. For example: to choice your parents or you career. I am ready to go against my parents' whishes if that is really necessary.
I know that a day, my parents understand me.






Subject:

You are the narrator. Write a letter to a friend back home



19th July 2008,
in Florida.


Dear Sarah,


I hope that you are good. Do you want know how I am? I am fine and I am very happy to be in Florida. This stat is for me, the best of US. You know that I love sunny and beach. So here I find my happiness. It's only my second day and I not visit the county but I fell that this month will be the best month of my life. You must probably say that I am very exiting...
In Daytona Beach, landscapes are nice, the day like the night. Tomorrow, I will go out to sunburn and surfing. During my sojourn, I hope visit also, Orlando, Tampa, St. Petersburg Beach…
Here, people are very nice and open-minded. In the airport a charming boy takes my luggage to the taxi. Hotel also is good. My bedroom is enough comfortable.
I think of you very much my dear friend.
It's very bad that you back home. The next year you must travel with me.

I miss you very much my Sassa;

Your friend for ever,

Katy.
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Doudou



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Localisation : New-York
Date d'inscription : 26/12/2005

MessageSujet: Re: expression   Mer 24 Sep - 13:32

Salut, Mimi.

Afin de gagner du temps, je recopie chaque phrase en faisant toutes les modifications requises.
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In your choice of career, are you ready to go against your parents' whishes? (150mots)

When adult was a small child, his parents educated him and gave him and gave him a decent life. But a day, the small child become an adult which responsibility and works.Sometimes, you must do a choice between you parents' will and your career.
When you were small, your parents educated you and provided a decent life for you. But one day, you grew up and were faced with all of the responsibilites and endeavors of an adult. At that stage of life, you had to choose between what your parents wanted for you and your own personal choice of a career.

If I am must to do this choice, I will be depress, because I love my parents and I couldn't hurt them or abandon them. So, I think that I choice another career if my parents were against my first choice. I want see them happy.
Personally speaking, if I were faced with the decision of choosing between the two, I would be depressed because I love my parents and wouldn't want to hurt or abandon them. So I would place their wishes above mine in my choice of a career since I want them to be happy.

But if my career is very important for me and if I don't have a second choice of career: I don't sure to accept my parent's whishes.I will explain them the importance of situation and perhaps they accept my choice.
However, if the career I chose were very important to me, and I had no other options, I'm not sure I would abide by my parents' wishes. I would explain to them how important my choice was and hope that they agree with my decision.

So you can sometimes be in embarrassing situation. For example: to choice your parents or you career. I am ready to go against my parents' whishes if that is really necessary.I know that a day, my parents understand me.
There is no doubt how uncomfortable a situation like this can be. Having to choose between your parents' wishes and your own is not easy. I would only go against their choice if I felt it were absolutely necessary. I would hope that one day they would understand why I made the choice I did.

Subject:

You are the narrator. Write a letter to a friend back home

19th July 2008,
in Florida.
July 19, 2008
Florida


Dear Sarah,

I hope that you are good. Do you want know how I am? I am fine and very happy to be in Florida.
I hope you are feeling well. As for me, I'm fine and happy to be in Florida.
This stat is for me, the best of US. You know that I love sunny and beach. So here I find my happiness.
Of all the states in the US, I think this one is the best. You know how much I love sunshine and beaches. So this is where I'm really happy.
It's only my second day and I not visit the county but I fell that this month will be the best month of my life. You must probably say that I am very exiting...
It's only my second day and [je comprends pas cette partie de la phrase], but I feel this will be the best month of my life. You can imagine how excited I am.
In Daytona Beach, landscapes are nice, the day like the night. Tomorrow, I will go out to sunburn and surfing. During my sojourn, I hope visit also, Orlando, Tampa, St. Petersburg Beach…
In the Daytona Beach area, the landscapes are so nice, during the day and at night. While I'm here, I also plan to visit Orlando, Tampa, and the beach at St. Petersburg.
Here, people are very nice and open-minded. In the airport a charming boy takes my luggage to the taxi. Hotel also is good. My bedroom is enough comfortable.
Here the people are very nice and open-minded. When I was at the airport, a charming young man carried my luggage to the taxi for me. I'm living in a good hotel too. My bedroom is quite comfortable.
I think of you very much my dear friend.
It's very bad that you back home. The next year you must travel with me.
I think of you often my dear friend. Next year, you must travel with me.

I miss you very much my Sassa.

Your friend for ever,

Katy.


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Date d'inscription : 15/02/2006

MessageSujet: Re: expression   Mer 24 Sep - 15:19

oui, excuse moi Doudou pour la phrase: It's only my second day and I not visit the county

je pense que c'est plutôt: It's only my second day, so I don't visit the county ;

en fait je voulais dire: c'est seulement mon deuxième jour en Floride, donc je n'ai pas encore visiter la région (ou l'Etat je sais pas ce qu'il faut dire)


merci bien.
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Date d'inscription : 26/12/2005

MessageSujet: Re: expression   Mer 24 Sep - 17:49

c'est seulement mon deuxième jour en Floride, donc je n'ai pas encore visiter la région

It's only my second day in Florida, so I haven't really had a chance to familiarize myself with the whole state.
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