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Women's role has envolved during the last centuries. At the beginning, she works at home doing (tâches ménagères) and next she becames nurse to help injured men coming of war. But can women leave their home and also go to the battlefields? Could the society see women going from the homefront to the battlefields?
At first, no women coan't go do war because they are physically wear, they are risk to be wounded and her beauty will disapear because of scars and lose of one leg perhaps.
Yes, they should go to the battlefields because study women resist better then men to pain and sufferings. They can going bick or waxing.
Secondly, no because womenhad a lot of responsabilities at home: kids are waiting and so she shouldn't be absent for a long time because they need their mum to grow up well, more preisely to develop their personalty, to feel that somebody loves him, to talk to someone at home...
But, yes they can go because men or grands parents can look after them when they will ben at war, it's exacty the same problem.
Third, men's army preserve. It's hard for a women to have a good relationship with colleagenes because men are chauvinicts! What's more, they could be more men than women so women wouldn't feel well and men could abuse sexually.
But, yes they could go at battlefields becausethere is a sexual equality in the army. Indeed, women have the same rights, same duties to defend their homeland: it's a full citizen.
At least, no they shouldn't go to war because women are (par nature) more pacifist. Indeed, there is less fights (de la part) of girls at school. Yes, because when soldiers are needed everyone is useful for the fatherland a citizen has to be patriotic and feel necesity to defend the country.
To conclude, I think that women shouldn't go to the battlefields like testify the point of view of the society which had (incorporer) that women are less stronger that men and that her role is to educate children.