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MessageSujet: Rédaction sur l'égalité.   Mer 10 Oct - 12:58

Hello!
merci de bien vouloir corriger mes erreurs de syntaxe etc. Wink thanks

When we speak about equality, the first idea that comes is that we are not equal, because of our different conditions of life. However, our common point: we are all humans. Moreover the society should help us to be more equal.

It is a reality, at birth we have different parents, we are born in different countries with its way of life, some babies have an handicap for all their life, we don't have the same figure, intelligence. A lot of difference that make us think that we are not equal. Moreover, according to your social class we don't have the same life expectancy: for instance, the working class have a shorter life than a CEO. The minors work in dangerous conditions for their heaths. According to a doctor, our neurological constitution can be influence our mood. In fact some brains don't produce enough of chemical agents that we need to be happy. Also, the society has its weakness. In the 50th, despite the declaration of independence which proclaim all the men equal, there used to be hard unequalities between black and white people. And today, there is the famous glass ceiling. It's harder for a woman to climb the ladder to get a higher position at work.

Society has its weakness yet all governements promise to make it more equalitarian with laws which are the same for all the citizens. School should give to the young the same opportunities. And it can be a social elevator. We can not forget that we are all humans, as vulnerable in the face of the nature or of the death. According to a clergyman, we will be equal when we reach heaven.

Finally, we can be different but without difference where the world goes. And with progress we try to give at all the same opportunities.
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MessageSujet: Re: Rédaction sur l'égalité.   Mer 10 Oct - 15:05

Bonsoir, BBoop.

When we speak about equality, the first idea that comes is that we are not equal, because of our different conditions of life. However, our common point: we are all humans. Moreover the society should help us to be more equal.
When we speak about equality, the first idea that comes to mind is that we are not equal because of the different conditions of our lives. However, we all have one thing in common: we are all human beings. Moreover, it is the responsibility of society to ensure the equality of its members.

It is a reality, at birth we have different parents, we are born in different countries with its way of life, some babies have an handicap for all their life, we don't have the same figure, intelligence. A lot of difference that make us think that we are not equal. Moreover, according to your social class we don't have the same life expectancy: for instance, the working class have a shorter life than a CEO. The minors work in dangerous conditions for their heaths. According to a doctor, our neurological constitution can be influence our mood. In fact some brains don't produce enough of chemical agents that we need to be happy. Also, the society has its weakness. In the 50th, despite the declaration of independence which proclaim all the men equal, there used to be hard unequalities between black and white people. And today, there is the famous glass ceiling. It's harder for a woman to climb the ladder to get a higher position at work.
The reality is that we have all been born with different parents, and in different countries and cultures. Some babies are born with a lifetime handicap, others have a different appearance and IQ. There are enough differences between human beings to convince us that we are not all equal. According to contemporary statistics, our life expectancy depends upon the social class we are born into. For instance, the working class has a shorter lifespan than that of CEOs. How long can a miner be expected to live when he has to work in conditions that threaten his health and his life? According to reports by doctors, our individual constitutions have a direct effect on our moods. In fact, some brains do not produce enough of the chemical agents that we need to be happy. Furthermore, society has weaknesses that prevent equality. Despite the Declaration of Independence which proclaims the equality of all people, outstanding inequalities existed between Blacks and Whites. And in the white-collar business world, there exists what is known as the “glass ceiling”, which refers to how high up the corporate ladder a woman is permitted to climb.

Society has its weakness yet all governements promise to make it more equalitarian with laws which are the same for all the citizens. School should give to the young the same opportunities. And it can be a social elevator. We can not forget that we are all humans, as vulnerable in the face of the nature or of the death. According to a clergyman, we will be equal when we reach heaven.
Because of its inherent weaknesses, most governments promise to legislate and enact laws which will result in a more egalitarian society. Schools are obliged to provide equal educational opportunities for their students. In my opinion, the educational system should be a “social elevator.” We must not forget that we are all human. We are all subject to the forces of nature and the eventuality of death. I like what one clergyman said, “We will be equal when we reach heaven.”

Finally, we can be different but without difference where the world goes. Cette phrase n'a aucun sens.
And with progress we try to give at all the same opportunities.
Finally, differences are inevitable; but as society evolves with increased knowledge, it is possible for everyone to have the same opportunities as everyone else.
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