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phil1988



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Date d'inscription : 22/10/2006

MessageSujet: Correction de rédaction:   Lun 27 Nov - 12:10

Bonjour, Hello :

Est-ce que quelqu'un peu me corriger cette rédaction:

First of all, If I could go in a foreign country, I would like to go in a English-speaking country (pays anglophones).
I think that will be very exciting. I could see another culture. For instance if I go in Canada I will be able to see similarities between French heritage and English impact on the history of the country.
Nevertheless, live there will lead me into improving my English.
However, I think I must have refrained from living with French.
On the other hand, it is true that if I will go in north America I will be very far of my friends and my family.
I will stay in this country for a long time because traveling are all the more expensive as distances rise.
That could make me aware of importance of family and friends. I can expect they to miss them; and maybe my parent could reproach me for abandoning them.
I will have avoid being alone but I must have tried to integrate myself in society.
About job, its not sure that I found a work, and if the situation will become worst and worst maybe I could be homeless.

To sum up I think go to live abroad would be a good thing. I can't be denied that to discover unknow lands and to change of sceney will allow me for open my mind.
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MessageSujet: Re: Correction de rédaction:   Lun 27 Nov - 13:42

Salut, Phil.

First of all, if I could travel to a foreign country, I would like to go to an English-speaking country.

I think that would be very exciting. I could observe another culture. For instance, if I went to Canada, I would be able to see the similarities between its French heritage and the English impact on its history.

Nevertheless, living there would help me to improve my English. However, I think I would have to avoid living with French-speaking people there. On the other hand, it is true that if I went to North America, I would be very far away from my friends and my family. I would stay in this country for a long time because the more you travel, the more expensive it is. Living abroad would make me aware of importance of family and friends. I would expect them to miss me; and my parents might reproach me for abandoning them.

As an immigrant, I would try very hard to mix with the local inhabitants of the country I live in. I'm not sure I would find employment, and the worst that could happen is that I would be homeless.

To sum up, I think living abroad would be a good thing. There's no denying that exploring unknown lands and having a change of scenery would give me the opportunity to open my mind to new possibilities.


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phil1988



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MessageSujet: Re: Correction de rédaction:   Lun 27 Nov - 15:21

Merci, beaucoup DOUDOU pour cette réponse rapide et très efficace ! j'ai confondu le futur avec le conditionnel ! aie aie
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Doudou



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MessageSujet: Re: Correction de rédaction:   Lun 27 Nov - 17:33

Je suis ravi de t'avoir aidé, Phil. Pour le reste, c'est pas tellement grave. Plus on pratique, plus on s'améliore.
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